On Excessive Packaging
Wandering at the supermarkets, you could find that the shelves are fulfilled with fancy and excessive packaging goods with high price, especially when festivals approach. Although the government has concerned with that issue, the phenomena still flourishes.
The reasons can be listed as follows. First, manufactures could benefit from the fancy packaging. Glorious packaging would increase the price to a large extent, from which they can gain excessive money. Second, most of this kind of goods are brought and sent as gifts to their relatives and leaders. Gorgeous packaging would attract people’s attention and make the people who buy them have the honor to send them out.
To my mind, excessive packaging is just a waste of resources and money. Most people would throw the package away after they opened it, which would lead to a severe pollution. To prevent the situation, every citizen should be aware of the problem and laws must be made to restrict the manufactures to cut down on luxurious packaging.
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