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【沪江网校版】2011年12月英语六级作文范文——高分版

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The Way to Success First essay—stream of thought type

The Way to Success

"Genius is one percent inspiration and ninety-nine percent perspiration." And here comes our question, what is the way to success?
A strong will and great efforts are the most essential two keys to the door of success.
Why do people fail to achieve their goal? The reason is that most of them give up halfway due to their lack of a strong will once they encounter any difficulty. A man of a strong will always sticks to his cause no matter how tough it might be.
Would Thomas Edison be such a great man in history if he had done nothing but possessing a strong will? We are all familiar with his story that he had tried one thousand kinds of materials before he finally made his great bulb light up. Without hard effort, Edison might have been a nobody. Without efforts, no one can succeed.
To sum up, a strong will and great efforts can help one open up the way to success. Where there is a will with efforts, there is a way.

【作文解析】

本次六级考试作文题为The way to success,与本次四级考试作文Nothing succeeds without a strong will遥相呼应,大同小异,都是在讨论成功这一话题。

此次六级考试作文的话题依然是老生常谈,即通往成功的道路,相信很多考生对此并不陌生,背过范文的同学写起来肯定也是得心应手。
该范文段落结构清晰,阐释说理也足以让人信服,是一篇不错的作文。

开篇作者通过引用爱迪生关于天才的一句名言来引出问题,吸引读者注意,引起读者的思考。紧随其后,作者就开门见山地亮出了自己的观点:只有坚强的意志和不懈的努力才能打开成功的大门。

第二段,作者同样以一个问题来引领全段,引发思考。然后通过对比不成功和最终成功的人的不同表现,来阐释坚强的意志对获得成功的重要作用。

第三段,作者进一步阐释“仅有坚强的意志,没有实在的努力,也能成功吗?”同样是先发问,然后举了爱迪生的事例,来证明答案是否定的。举名人的例子,而非个人的实例来作为文章的论据才更有说服力,这也是这篇作文的高明之处。

最后一段,作者先以第一句话进行了总结,然后为了加强作文结尾的力度,作者还对名言“Where there is a will, there is way”进行了改编,换成了自己的观点,为我所用,这也是本篇范文的一个两点之处。注意,写作文时对名言进行恰当地改编,不仅能体现幽默创新的一面,同样也体现了作者不错的文字驾驭技巧,考官也是很欢迎这样的文章的。

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2011-12-17 17:30 编辑:甯老师
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  • jayz168 说:

    没有结合 Lincoln 的那句话啊!题目要求的是评论那句话! 貌似有点走题。

    2011-12-17 19:57 回复 支持(0) 反对(0) 沙发
  • mzheng 说:

    This is never an good essay. He or She needs to elaborate each paragrah by giving more details.

    2011-12-23 08:13 回复 支持(0) 反对(0) 板凳
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