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小编摘要:雅思G类小作文虽然简单,但是借鉴别人可能会犯的语法错误也是提升自己作文分数的一个方法。下面让我们一起来看一下吧。

Dear Sir,

I am writing to ask for information about organizing an executive event at your venue.

My name is Marcio, I work for a multinational company, and we need prepare an event that will be held on December 17, 2007. I would like to obtain the below(following) information :

1. How many people can your club support (contain)?
2. What kind of food to(do) you serve?
3. Is there any special service for disabled people(available for the disabled)?
4. What time can we start the event?
5. Do you have any “animation service” to offer?
6. How much do you charge for your services ?
7. Do you offer any transportation service ?
8. Is there anything else included on your services ?

I need (would like)to receive this information until October 2007, because I need to prepare the department in charge of the event and invite the target audience. You can send me this information via fax, using the number +55 (21) 3422-9559, or email me at : marciomarinho@gmail.com. I am confident that your company will provide us with the best type of service we need, based on abundance of good reviews about your company.

Yours faithfully,
Marcio Marinho

这封信是封不错的信,很好的完成了题目的要求,也有正确的结构和恰当的写信风格和单词。但是有一些句子还是有语法问题,service这个词语出现次数太多,建议找同义词。

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