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You are advised to spend a maximum of 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below gives information on wages of Somecountry over a ten-year period. Write a report for a university tutor describing the information shown.

You should write at least 150 words.

Wages growth line graph

The linegraph(line graph) describes the growth of wages in Somecountry from year 1993 to year 2003。

The growth started at two percent in 1993, but it didn’t  stay there very long before it rapidly doubled in 1994. Further on, the percentages declines(declined) to three percent in 1995, stayed steady for year, before starting to rise slowly and ending up just under four percent in 1997. 1998 was the best year where the wages peaked at six percent.

However, after 1998 the wages declined nearly every year. Only a year after , the percentage dropped to well under three percent, stayed there on roughly three percent till 2000. In 2002 the wages reached the lowest point of just one percent growth. Luckily the growth rose in 2003 at junst(just) under two percent.

Overall, the growth rate in wages in Somecountry has shown striking changes through the ten years.

这篇小作文相当不错,很好的完成了题目要求,用词也很准确。问题是字数没有到要求,也有一些语法错误,要值得注意。

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