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In some countries children have very strict rules of behavior, in other countries they are allowed to do almost anything they want. To what extent should children have to follow rules?


The extent to which children have to follow rules is in itself a very complex issue, since children across the world grow up in very different cultures. In India(In India,) for example, the level of morality is very high and children are to be very submissive to their parents as well as other adults around them. This, however, is not the case for the Western countries of the world where children follow the motto ”Thou shalt do what thou wilt”(you will do what you want) as promoted by celebrities and rock stars. I believe that following strict rules has both advantages as well as(both…and) serious drawbacks as discussed below.


Firstly, strict rules of behavior create responsible and respectful children who in turn mature into respectful adults. This forms a stable society which is virtually free from vices such as prostitution and drug abuse. Secondly, if children do not follow strict rules of behavior, they will get out of hand and become work- shy and indolent. This will then create a burden on society since the government has to find ways to cater for these social ills.


However, forcing children to follow strict rules of behavior doesn’t (不要用缩写,这是informal的)always yield positive results as discussed above, most of the time it backfires and works against society. For example, teenagers are more likely to do the opposite of what they are told to do simply because they want to be independent. Children should also have rights to exercise their free will and develop their own pattern of behaviors. Strict rules simply destroy the individuality of children if they are imposed on them.


At the end of the day, it is clear that children should be guided by rules, but these rules should not be imposed on them because as human beings, they need to have room to develop their own traits of character and adopt a behavioral pattern of their own.


该文章唯一的缺点就是过长,有309字。但是这是一篇相当好的文章,语言组织流畅,用词多变。既讨论了positive的方面,又讨论了negative的方面。最后还给出了自己的立场。

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