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小编摘要:和之前5分得雅思作文是同样的题目,但这篇作文就取得了8分。下面让我看看究竟这篇作文有哪些精妙之处可以让考官对其青睐有加呢?

Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?


Capital punishment is always associated with ignorance and intolerance. In fact, we must acknowledge that some people disagree with this kind of penalty but others are totally in favour. Portugal was the first European country to end this kind of penalty. Since the 19th century, tolerance and respect for life are(have been) important values. Moreover, we can affirm that all the Europe(all Europe)remains under the same codes. Maybe because of a religious view point, life respect is a typical value in the Old Catholic world.


Those who are in favour of capital punishment are particularly in developing countries. However, this is not just an image of third world countries. Actually, USA is where this kind of punishment has its higher(highest) rates. The state of Texas, in particular, is at the top, supporting this measure against crime, especially those related with serial killers and those involving children. In a society dominated by fear and government control, it is foreseen that this penalty will continue into a future next(into a future).


Maybe this is not a clear question. As we can see there are several values here and of course cultural behaviours. The roots of the question are religious, cultural, ethical and even geographical. The world is divided and the law systems show those divisions. The solutions, however can lead us to other questions concerning revenge and justice. It will be(Will it be) better to kill a person because of his crimes? Can we admit that life sentence could be a much better sentence? In fact, rehabilitation is the right way especially with an accurate psychological evaluation first. Some people are lost forever, and in my opinion some murderers and other perverted people will suffer more in jail. In this sense, capital punishment is a soft release.


和之前的5分作文一样是讲capital punishment,这一篇雅思作文是8分。先从字数来看,这篇文章显然是比较长的,可见要拿高分的文章确实都是字数比较多的,但是一定要保证语法的错误较少和单词的使用较地道。作者开篇就提出自己的观点,并通过例子来表达自己的立场。所以,烤鸭们在作文考试的时候尽量不要迂回,因为每个考官阅卷的时间是有限的,你不在开头让他眼前一亮的话很有可能到时候你拿到作文的分数就是眼前一黑。

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