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小编摘要:雅思作文字数是保证拿基本分的一个关键,同时正确的拼写以及语法的使用也是极其重要的。下面我们来看看这篇5分作文吧。

University should give same amount of money to their sport activities as they give to their liabrary. Do you agree or disagree?


Yes, I do feel that universities should have equal budget for their liabraries as well as (for 介词不能漏)sport activities. It is our general belief that good player(冠词呢?) can not be good student and hence we restrict our children’s sport activities at college level. Moreover, academic degree has much more value than sport activities which naturally compels students to focus more on their studies than their sport interest.


Most of the universities keep sport at last number(the bottom) of their priority list, because of which(therefore) good players do not get enough facilities and equipments(equipment是不可数) to improve thier skills and eventually they loose(loose和lose不是一个意思) their interest.Universities can play (冠词a漏了) substantial role in shaping this upcoming talent by providing them with good trainers and equipments which is otherwise expensive to afford. Also it will attract other students towards(to) sports and inculcate importance of physical fitness in them.


Universities should produce genious(geniuses拼写不能错) in all fields rather than only concentrating on progress of scholars. Hence, I feel that universities should allot equal money to  library (libraries 注意单复数)as well as sport activities.

烤鸭们一看就会注意到,这篇文章得地方的很大一个原因是因为字数不够。字数不够的话,基本就是6分无望了。所以烤鸭们平时一定要多练笔多积累,以免临场头脑空空,下笔没有神。同时这篇文章evidence给的太少了,错误也比较多,所以才拿了5分。

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