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小编摘要:雅思8分作文对于大部分中国考鸭们来说都是可望而不可及的,但是这真的是难以企及的吗?下面让我们看看这篇雅思8分作文,或许你可以从中得到启发。

Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way.


Every four years, the whole world stops to watch international sporting events such as the Olympics and the Football World Cup in which athletes show their best performance to make their country proud of them. (第一句paraphrase所给的question)These sporting occasions have proved to be helpful in easing international tensions in difficult times when powerful leaders were trying to control the world's economy and other governments were fighting over land.(给出自己的观点,老外们写作比较喜欢开门见山,而不是中国烤鸭的迂回)


The Olympic Games are one of the best examples which prove how sporting events can bring nations together, at least temporarily.(给出主题句,用词客观,没有用绝对的词) From ancient History, when Greeks and Romans would interrupt battles to participate in the games, to the more recent international disputes, when athletes from Palestine and Israel would forget their differences, compete pacifically and even embrace each other after an event(给出evidence). Moreover, these popular events have called the world's attention to the terrible consequences of wars; thus some leaders have tried to accept agreements to end their dispute and live peacefully.


Similarly, international sporting events show benefits in some developing countries which live in a daily internal civil war. For example, Brazil has a high rate of unemployment, lack of education, hunger, crime, poverty and corruption which leads to an immense embarrassment of being Brazilian and a low self-esteem. However, when the Football World Cup starts, the Brazilian squad, which is considered the best team in the world, provokes an amazing feeling of pride in their country. Most people seem to forget all their problems and even the criminal activity decreases. They paint roads with the national colors, use wear the Brazilian team shirt and buy national flags. Moreover, the competition brings families and neighbors together and even rival gangs watch the games and celebrate peacefully.


In conclusion, popular sporting events play an important role in decreasing international tensions and liberating patriotic feelings as History has shown.


这篇文章无论是从语言结构还是从所举例子都体现了很好的英语素养。虽然用词并不是非常生僻,但是该考生在论证的时候给出了很有力的论据。所以,烤鸭们想拿高分光背华丽的辞藻还是不够的,要多花功夫在积累论点论据上。

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