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小编摘要:雅思作文考试向来是中国烤鸭们的“心病”,其实要拿高分就要知己知彼,投考官所好。作文到底如何写才能获得考官的青睐呢?下面让我们来看下雅思高分作文的一些特点吧。


Even though globalization affects the world’s economies in a positive way, its negative side should not be forgotten. Discuss.

In the present age, globalization is playing an increasingly(可以替代more and more) important role in our lives. But in the meantime whether it is a blessing or a curse(advantage 和 disadvantage另外一种形式) has sparked a heated debate(aroused hot debate也可以). Some people argue that globalization has a fundamentally beneficial influence on our lives, while many others contend that it has a detrimental effect as well.

A convincing argument can be made about globalization not only playing a pivotal role in the development of technology and economy, but also promoting the cultural exchange between different countries. To start with, it is the globalization that impelled many corporations to become an international group, thereby making a contribution to the local technology and employment. Specifically(善于用副词), when a multinational group establishes a factory in a developing country, the new equipment, the new management skills and the job vacancies are all in the best interest of the local society. Moreover, people worldwide can get to know each other better through globalization. It is easy to see that more and more Hollywood blockbusters show cultures different from American, some recent examples are ‘Kungfu Panda’ and ‘The Mummy’(举evidence).

Admittedly, profit driven globalization has severely affected young people. Today, in the metropolises in different countries, it is very common to see teenagers wearing NIKE T-shirts and Adidas footwear, playing Hip-Hop music on Apple iPods and eating at KFC. The culture that took a thousand years to form just seems similar in these cities; it looks like you can only distinguish them by their language. Meanwhile, in some developing countries, sweat workshops are always a concerning issue. For instance, reports show that some teenagers employed by NIKE’s contractors work in smelly factories over 14 hours a day, but are only paid fifty cents per hour.

In summary(To sum up), I would concede that globalization does come with some adverse effects. Despite that fact, benefits created by it far outweigh the disadvantages. Overall, I am convinced that we should further promote globalization and meanwhile the local government should take measures to combat culture assimilation and sweat workshops.(个人立场清晰,并提出进一步建议)

这篇雅思作文很长,有338个字(超过了一般雅思作文要求的长度).它有很好的结构,自己的立场也表达的很清晰,很好地组织所给的信息,所用的单词多变,语法错误也比较少。所以定为7.5+作文 。

 

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