WRITING TASK 1
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The table below shows the proportion of people aged 20–24 participating in education and the labour force in Australia from 1984 to 2004.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make any comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
20–24 year-olds: participation in education and the labour force 1984, 1994 and 2004
1984 1994 2004
In full-time education 8.6% 17.0% 26.2%
Employed full-time 51.5% 53.5% 48.5%
part-time study 2.6% 1.3% 2.7%
no study 14.8% 8.8% 9.1%
Unemployed 10.3% 10.3% 5.0%
Not available for work 12.2% 9.0% 8.4%
This table describes the proportion of people aged 20 to 24 who participated in education and labour force in Australia between 1984 and 2004.
One significant feature of this table is the high number of people employed full-time which was 51.5% in 1984 and reduced 48.5% in 2004.
In contrast, the number of full-time students is much smaller in comparison to that of full-time employed people. Although the full-time students number increased with 17.6% between 1984 and 2004, their number reaches only 26.2% in 2004.
There are also fewer part-time students, who also work part-time (2.7% in 2004). In comparison, the number of those who work part-time but do not study was just under 15% in 1984 and slightly decreased to just over 9% in 2004.
It is also interesting to note that the number of unemployed people decreased by more than 50%, from 10.3% in 1984 to 5.0% in 2004.
It can be seen, therefore, that there are clear differences between the number who work or study, in Australia.
The writer of this summary makes a good attempt at selecting the main features in the data, and only reports details where these support general observations. Most of the main features are described, although one or two have been omitted. For example, the writer ignores the information in the middle column completely. In addition, the conclusion is quite weak. There are few errors of grammar or spelling, and where these occur they never reduce comprehension.
WRITING TASK 2
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic:
In some countries the government collects and stores a lot of information about individuals, such as their medical records. Some people feel this is necessary to provide efficient services, but others feel it threatens individual privacy.
What are your views?
You should write at least 250 words.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
The concept of government databases containing detailed information about individual citizens is very controversial.
On the one hand, there are definite benefits to be gained for everyone. For example, medical researchers need to have access to comprehensive information about people’s health in order to identify accurately the causes and development of diseases. This in turn means that they can develop better treatments, or even prophylactics. Also, having information about an individual’s family history and their genetic characteristics allows doctors to give advice about lifestyle, or family planning. In addition, if governments hold comprehensive information about the general health of the population, they are able to plan education and training more effectively, and allocate adequate budgets.
On the other hand, the accumulation of information by governments is perceived by some to be undesirable, and even threatening. For instance, sometimes governments collect information about people without their knowledge, especially information about their financial status and assets. They claim that the information is necessary in order to prevent or detect tax evasion.
In my opinion, individuals have a right to privacy, and governments sometimes go too far in these matters. When they gather information without the approval, or even the knowledge of the individuals concerned, they cross the line of what can be regarded as acceptable. I think that the most important principal is that of consent: people should be consulted about the type of information as well as the methods used to collect it. Furthermore, the purpose of collecting information should be made transparent.
In conclusion, while collecting and storing information about private citizens is certainly useful in many respects, there should be open debate about the nature and extent of the activity.
The writer responds to the question in a wholly appropriate way, and employs a very good range of vocabulary in the process. Relevant arguments are presented in his/her discussion of the issues, and these are supported with suitable examples. Ideas are presented in a coherent sequence, starting with the arguments for, and then against the collection of information, and ending with a clear statement of the writer’s own position. Suitable connectives are also used to great effect to introduce and link ideas. Grammatical structures are used with complete accuracy, and despite the occasional error of spelling, the reader’s understanding never falters.
This essay would probably receive Band 7.